As writers, and as we get older in general, description is vital in what we write. Pay attention to detail, they always say. As we age, people expect our attention to specificities to get better and better.
Take this for example:
She had short, curly brown hair. Her eyes were blue.
While it’s okay to be basic, this is a mistake on a few levels:
- The details should be spread out amongst the course of the novel, not told immediately.
- There’s no direct focus other than the character.
Also, what age does the narrator sound like?
(Please, comment your answer below)
When writing, take into account the age, intelligence, and personality of the narrator. Even if it’s in third-person, the narrator should mimic the personality of your focal character.
Now, take this description:
She bounced into her apartment, crystal irises buzzing with the energy surging through her brain. Her perky curls danced on her shoulders as she plopped in front of the blue glow of her computer screen.
Now, I’m not saying this is ideal. In fact, this is flowery. A lot of metaphors. But I did try to put “her” appearance into action. I also didn’t use simple sentences.
So, in the end, make sure you put the details to action.